I honestly am confused a bit by this story.

I think it's interesting but don't understand it exactly.

Keep up the work.

-Also practice with your grammar a little and it should get a lot better.

Yes... that was interesting.

I liked it kinda... though I couldn't connect with the characters. I think you need to use more emotive words to describe how they feel.

It sounds like a good idea, so keep it up.

Also- there were a few mistakes which distracted me a little but I'm sure like you said it was probably because you were so tired.

Itt wasunt dat greet.