I miss this story :(

Alright. So I have read this story to the entirity that it has been writen to. And while the characters did not have the characterisation that I personally give them, they remained in character to what you gave them and their actions made sence the whole story long, so good for you. I was willing to say the changes were due to dealing with new reincarnations rather than the familiar old seishi that I had loved from the series. Which is perfectly ok. Probably the thing I missed the most was Ryuuen not having Nuriko's "go get'em" personality and confidence.

As for PoV, thank you for not randomly switching at annoying moments between different people's first person perspective. Though there were moments where I would have loved a chance to see into someone else's head, if a writer chooses first person then it's important they stick with the same person the whole way through. Otherwise they ought to just go with third person and skim through everyone's thoughts.

I like how you're mixing in the other seishi in this story, and showing them all building different relationships with each other then what they had in the book, going off the nature vs nurture debate, but I got to question why as they remember themselves the seishi don't automatically hone back in to their old friendships? Like that Chiriko had been so very close to Tasuki and looked at him like an older brother/role modle... (I mean, Tasuki even was the one always holding baby-Chiriko in the 3rd OAV. And if that's not proof the bandit has a serious soft spot for him, I don't know what is...) Also, I don't really think Miaka would be glomping Ayuru and tagging "-chan" on to the end of his name after only knowing him for a day. I don't think "-chan" would be tagged on to him at any point, actually, seeing as he's supposed to be ~10 years older than them and everyone's living in the states... Going from the US side of things, no one would have a reason to plug a suffix on his name, and the Japanese side of things would make "respect athority/elders" and "politeness above all else" cause it to be "-san" for the vast majority of them with maybe a "-kun" for those esspecially affectionate.

There are some other small things that rubbed me a little wrong over the course of the story, but they aren't drastic enough for me to make a fuss over it. There's also a lot of things that I absolutely loved (or else I wouldn't have bothered reading both fics to their entirety) and find it a shame that you stopped so close to what appears to be the end of the tale, but at the same time I understand that life moves on and things get in the way and old interests wane. It would probably be rather hard after nearing ten years to come back and write the completion of the story, but if it *is* in you it would be nice to see the end. Or maybe even just an authors note explaining to the readers what the ending would have been in summery format just to obtain that feeling of completion in knowing how everything ends. As it sits now, the blaring questions of "do they all make it out alive?", "How does Soi and her infatuation effect the Nagako/Tomo situation Nuriko is building?", "Do they ever find the rest of the 28 seishi?", "What ever happened to Ashitare, anyway?", "Is Chiriko EVER going to get the screnetime he desreves?", etc.. are left unanswered.

One thing I ought to ask is why no one went and picked up Yui? As the miko, and as someone that is needed by Miboshi, and as someone on Suzaku's side who knows all the seishi and who they are loyal to and who it's the duty of to find all the Seiryuu seishi and will therefore have them gather to her... why was she left unattended and on her own for the whole story? Did you just not think of it? Were you uncomfortable writing her character?

umm... yeah, I'm going to end it there and not worry about continuing on the rant.

shade and sweet water

keysha

Oh my god. I hardly ever review mid-story like this, especially not for old fics like this one, but seriously this chapter had me laying on the floor laughing myself to tears. Yay for Tama's return! Seriously that cat doesn't get enough love in fanfiction. I think my dorm mates are rather disturbed about my sanity now, but that's alright I don't overly like them anyway.

You write wonderful stories, by the way.

Shade and Sweet Water

Keysha

I'm really sorry to see that this one hasn't been finished or added to in so long. Your style throughout this story and it's prequel has been extremely engaging and I've really been enjoying myself reading them.

At any rate, I'm marking the story anyway because it's brilliant and I believe that a chapter update on a story of this caliber is worth waiting for, even if it hasn't been updated in seven years.

Thank you for your hard work.

That was wicked hilarious! The Cat! OMG! Of all the people they could have run into, it was the cat, reincarnated as a person!

rotflmao

I'm laughing so hard at this point that I can barely see straight.

Just too bad you've decided not to continue... I loved it; I laughed so much!^^

I CANNOT BELIVE YOU NEVER FINISHED THIS!

YES ANGRY BIG CAPITAL LETTERS!

^^

Nuri-chan has been portrayed immensely in this I am uber impressed and even tho reading it for a second time still loving it... will most likely be back in a year or so cursing you for the lack of an ending AGAIN!

x

I miss this story, v.v

Ahh! It ends! Why does it end? Write more, I say! I needs to know what happens in the big, epic battle between good seishi and bad seishi!

Ahem... now that that's out of the way...

I love this story, too. It's even better than the first one. I can definitely see how you developed as a writer as the stories went on. And Sai and Ryuuen continue to be so cute together.

Tama! That definitely surprised me. But I think that I was laughing until Ryuuen calmed down. That was hilarious.

Hey,

I just wanted to say that I love Another Story and am so glad you finished it. I was reading it when you wrote it and I hate to say that it took me this long to go back to read it. We used to talk through email. I am a history major too except mine is East Asian History. I ended up graduating in 2006. I just wanted to say I love the story and see how you have been.

bai bai now.

I can't believe that almost happen to poor Nuriko! That scene made me cry knowing that he almost got ... Well you know... I hope that you can finish story cause it is very awesome and you know how to make me feel like any of the characters. Just, i feel sorry 4 him cause he wasn't suppose to get hurt, but he kinda saved Miaka's life, i guess... I read the whole story so far, so please continue this story! {Nuri&HoriLover14} (suppose to be 15 now... oh well!)

Well hello, 2008!

I read the last of your reviews and they ended coming last year. I just thought you needed another one so you can start typing a continuation. BY GOD! PLEASE! CONTINUE THIS!

I know I'm a late bloomer (dude, fushigi yuugi happened to have ended on the silver screen when I was still in the fifth grade-and now im in college, can you believe that?) Ah, damn, im rambling again.

Anyway, not to seem stalker-ish but I've read all your works. I decided to google you in hopes of finding a continuation to this spectacular fic and found none.

CONTINUE! Or I shall be forced to Crucio you to oblivion!

... BUWAHAHAHA...haha...ha. That was great! Can I fangirl Tom now? And his giant potato father?

I have read your previous story, "Another Story", and it was amazing! I have read all of this story as well and it was so sad what happen to Nuriko/Ryuuen.

You should continue this story 'cause when I finished it,

I was really hooked onto this spectacular story!

This is a favorite story I favor and favorite authors as well!

If you can, please read my fanfic too as well!

It's a Nuriko and Tamahome fic, but for like the first 6 chapters, it's like a Hotohori and Nuriko fic...

Anyway, good luck with this story and the future ahead!

-NuriandHorilover14-