|Reviews for Forbidden Designs|
| christopher 5/17/13 . chapter 8
Love the story hope you give misato more time with shinji .
| tymofey 5/13/13 . chapter 8
Misspelled "Morphix Ssytem" needs a quick fix, otherwise don't mind me, just incrementing your review counter.
| Amsim 1/15/13 . chapter 2
:) loved it! The science stuff is over my head but seems convincing to a noob like me.
| Amsim 1/14/13 . chapter 1
Gannon isn't a reference to LoZ is it? :P
PS loving this story so far
| Negima Uzumaki 1/13/13 . chapter 7
Love the new chapter, but you have this story as "Shinji/Asuka" couple, but in this chapter you have Shinji making love to Misato.
| EgyLynx 1/13/13 . chapter 7
... oh my, and what happen next?!
So i am wait?
| Venomancer 11/12/12 . chapter 6
This shit is beyond awesome.
| wingsofseyfert12 11/6/12 . chapter 4
Dude...as far as I have read so far this story is simply amazing.
First off I feel like I'm reading a Micheal Crichton novel. You must have really done your research in order to come up with all of this scientific jive and meld it together. I honestly can really only understand half of the scientific details you have put out but I still have a general idea as to what is going on. You made up a scenario, and instead of using the excuse of fiction you went out of your way into the nitty gritty details. I give you big kudos for taking the time to research, understand the theory and put it into writing.
What's better is that despite the science stuff you STILL manage to convey a good story without this reading like a chemistry book. Your OC's are wonderful and fun to read, especially Emil. I'm glad that someone realizes just how much of a bitch Yui Ikari really is. I honestly hope that Emil puts a bullet through both her and Gendo's eyes for putting humanity in such a precarious position just for their selfish desires.
I really hope you don't make Keel a total bad guy. I love what you have done to his character. Most people just write him off as some hateful cyborg but you breathed life into him. I could really imagine his joy as he lost his mechanical parts and have his own legs, arms and eyes again. His elation at being able to sprint at full speed and not even get tired. Something he has not been able to do since he was young. I understand if you want to still keep him as sort of an ass that wants things his way but it would be totally baller if he was at the least an anti-hero. It would really spice things up.
This story is badass and I have yet to read the last two chapters. Keep up the great work. I'll review again once I have finished chapters five and six.
| code R.R 8/8/12 . chapter 5
i don't understand why people don't read this more, it's good and is a very unique AU.
Maybe it's the massive info dump?
| code R.R 1/14/12 . chapter 3
oh the joy of this au. it seems very good so far
| code R.R 10/12/11 . chapter 2
this seems really nice i need to see more
| tymofey 7/3/11 . chapter 2
Aside from being totally awesome, this is probably the deepest and the most thought out fanfiction intro/prologue I've ever encountered! I get dizzy when i think about the possibilities of where the story can go from here. If you play it right, this can wery well develop into an epic tale of it's own, on par with other grand eva fics here, each with the well developed universe. Eagerly awaiting for continuation.
| HolyDragoon 6/23/11 . chapter 2
:O Oh my. Love this. Really! Making Keel young was funny, but going ahead with the concept and making this guy decent? Heh, brilliant. I will wait for more chapters, and I wonder how Shinji will be like 15 years from now, living with those three.
| WritersProse 6/22/11 . chapter 1
The ending sort of reminded me of the film Cocoon. I'm not quite sure where this story is going to be going, but I must say that the writing was top of the shelf. Very few EVA fics manage to cram as much detail as you have managed here, and for that you deserve a high-five. *high fives* You really need to get more reviews than you have. Just from this chapter alone, I can tell that this story is going to be on a whole other level compared to most of the fluff I typically trek through. Not that there is anything wrong with fluff, it is just great to read something that seems to have a great deal of intelligence and thought behind it. Hell, some of your descriptions of the scientific theories were fantastically detailed. I'm a bit jealous as a wannabe writer myself.
Also, your OC's are great! You've managed to sidestep all of the typical pitfalls with their development, and the characters are very mature (with the exception of one are two comments of things 'sucking balls', but everyone has had those sorts of moments). It is great to see an Evangelion story that doesn't focus around fourteen year olds and their psychological issues... which, you know, was already the focus of the series. To see 'much' older characters take the center stage makes my little fanboy heart smile just a bit.
Keep at it! I can't wait to see where you take this, and how it 'may or may not' tie into other sections of the Evangelion universe. It is great to see that your primary focus doesn't seem to be on the usual bunch of characters (Rei, Shinji, Misato, Asuka, etc). But you have done such a great job with keeping this your 'own thing' without having to rely on nostaliga. Most fan-fiction always seems to lean heavily on the source material in order to get anything forward from the characters, you know? Recycled scenes, reused scenarios, etc. Can't wait to read more, and you can probably expect a review of Chapter Two as soon as I get around to it.
| Greydon Creed 1/20/11 . chapter 1
Good start, especially Kiel getting his newly young face smashed in. *snerk* Hope Dr. Krane gets what she has coming to her. *g* This should really change the Scenario, for the better I hope. Look forward to moar.