This is a very interestin fic, and it seems to portrait the emotions of the guardsmen very well. i'm going to be following this fic.

Good job, but there are rooms for improvements:
Can't get enough of this, lengthen each perspective to make them it more clearly.
Fighting seems...to normal. Need to have something extraordinary, rather than cliches.
Be more specific as to how things are going. For example, guardsmen and heretics and Chaos Space Marines die, how and why did they die?

intresting i like it so far thou i wouldent mind more detale

Thanks for reviewing. I'm always looking for ways to improve, and perspective is a good place to start. I'll look for a way to improve that right away. I'll try and put out more material as well, I'm working on a plan for these characters, particularly Vlad.

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Short and sweet, I like it. Almost like a memorial to all the different soldiers of the Imperium and what they do, yet they all die the same way, for the Emperor.

You've got a good idea here but there needs to be a clear cut way to divide one person's perspective from another, I had to go back and read parts a couple times to figure out exactly what I was reading.

Again, good idea, but it just needs a little refinement.