LOL Zek And Resh are Probably Looking At Him And Thinking "Uhhhh. What's With Him?"

I absolutely love this pairing thanks to you, I hope you know. The only problem I have with these oneshots is that they end too soon! (The queen of the damned thinks you're cute, space boy. Man the hell up and go after her, ffs! You have a human form, don't you? Use it!)

Other than that though, I am incredibly amused by this, if a little surprised by Gira's random honesty. Especially since the whole basis of the fic was how good of a liar she is... Then again, maybe that irony was the whole point, and I just totally missed that? idk.

Either way, its a nice change from her usual "Leave me alone or I'll castrate you" crap. I just wish we could see where it went... maybe in a chapter 2 perhaps? :) (I can always hope!)

["Man, you really suck at this game," Zekrom guffaws. ]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."

[the legendary Pokemon ]

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

You're jumping between past and present tense. Don't do that.

You really should use said more. Said is invisible. You should only use other words occasionally, when you mean to draw attention to how it's being said.

Aw, you beat me in sticking Zekrom and Reshiram in a legend story. D:

(Though, for some reason, I keep imagining that Zekrom and Reshiram would be like Mordecai and Rigby from Regular Show. XD)

(...Oh God, I need to get out more.)

Anyway, good job. I liked the ending, and this was well thought-out. Awesomeness. w