I love it! but I prefer to hear how exactly Collingsworth's men were defeated. but it's still a great fan-fic.

This is a brilliant story, well done. You had me going there! Although i could never believe Watson is dead, he's too good a character!

well, you asked what I think, and I think (as well as Kaydon my sister) that you're, no offense, probly better off sticking with HP

I thought the story was really good, my only complaint is that it ended to abruptly. I think if you had drawn out the whole story a little more, especailly the end, it would have been better. Other than that, the plot was great, i enjoyed it. Congrats on a good job :)

wonderful. post your other story. loved the story idget. it was funny. drop the don't be a crimnal, and keep the be a marauder.

Adelaide Kay Holmes

Hmmmmmmm well its better than some I've seen but more chapters wouldn't be bad. Or maybe a sequel? Overall Its a good story but its a bit on the short side

Dawnspirit

It was a wonderful story with a wonderful plot, but I would have loved it if you explained more. Like how Holmes had followed Collingsworth and about Watson's captivity and maybe a more scornful conversation between Collingsworth and Holmes and more as to how Holmes got to Collingsworth's unaprehended; I would have thought Collingsworth would have men stationed around his building. But I did like the story! It would have been superb if you made it longer...maybe a three-chapter story? Two at least. Anyway, it was a good plot and the beginning really caught my attention. The ending was just a bit too rushed. I loved the beginning, though. It was soooo good!

Wow, I take it you'r a Holmes fan as well?

::smiles:: Well, intersting story. It kept me reading till the end and I deffinetly would want to read the first fic you wrote. See you around!

Whoa...intense! When he opened the box and found a human heart I was gasping! I wish there was more of a struggle, you know, fist fight at the end, but all in all I liked it. Excellant job portraying Holmes.

ok, was there a point to this story, if there is, I don't see it. Unless you are going to make it a series. Or maybe this is just one chapter. I hope so, I'd hate to think you thought it was good enough to stand alone.

Your Worshipfulness

I liked it, but it seemed somewhat unfinished, maybe a sequel? Who's heart was it by the way?

Great story, but who's heart was used?

Well, the concept was pretty good, but overall... I think that it would have been better had it been a bit longer. A couple of chapters or something. Gone into Holmes being upset over Watson, maybe even using cocaine. And had the end seem like more of a finale instead of the end of the first act. Please do not think that I am being mean or rude. I really do like your concept. Have you thought about re-writing it and going into more detail?

wow this story is really good please continue it have to go now i'm in school but please write more!

It's great! Hope you make a sequal to this with Collingsworth.