This was so unlike any other HP fanfiction. You have very different writing style than what I'm used to. If I had to put it to words I'd say it's... cute. Most other authors seem to forget that they are writing about 11 year old kids and make them sound much older. This story's atmosphere is much more like CCS anime than like HP books. I think I'd like to read the sequel if you finish it.
One thing I was thinking about, Gryffs had herbology with Puffs, right? At least in 2nd year I'm pretty sure they had. So that would make Ravens with Slytherins. Might be interesting, since Sakura is not only a muggleborn, but also a foreigner. Then again, she might be just ignored, who knows.

I honestly mean no offense by this, and I don't want to sound rude, but have you seen or read Harry Potter? I'm sorry if you take this the wrong way, but there are some things that are quite strange and that are not canon. Like, Platform -1. I don't quite understand that, because isn't it supposed to be Platform 9 3/4? And on the train, isn't there a woman with a sweets cart, rather than a candy bar? I don't mean to be offensive, but I'm just very confused by these things.

Is Syaoran-kun gonna be in this? I really hope so!

Decent story. The groundwork you laid out is very nice, and you definitely avoided most of the common pitfalls of crossovers. The plot makes sense, but there were a few points that didn't make sense or could be clarified. Around chapter 6, one of my persisting questions was "why didn't Sakura and Kero simply use Japanese?" You put a lot of emphasis on secrecy, and I'd think that they would at least try to be more secretive about it all. And in more dire situations, wouldn't Sakura slip into her native Japanese easily?

I liked the steady non-interference with the original plot; it helped keep the integrity of this fic. Your plot and the original are welded together fairly seamlessly.

The inclusion of Kaho as major character is also something I really like about this. It's always nice to put the side characters in the spotlight. However, I'm confused as to why Syaoran wasn't even mentioned after the first few chapters. Sakura absolutely loves this boy, and surely misses him as much as she misses Tomoyo. Which brings to another point: Sakura cares deeply for her family and friends, so why does she brush off homesickness and even comunication with them so easily? I think you should've shown more interaction between Sakura and her friends back home.

Many characters seem just a little OOC at times, but it's nothing major. I disagree with several of the actions Sakura and some professors took. You captured Oliver Wood's character perfectly, though.

How does Dumbledore know about the Cards? I don't think he'd be privy to such information.

Overall, it's a fairly good crossover.

you do know that kaho is like eriol's teacher even though eriol is a reincarnation right...

also toya and kaho are already together (an item)

so wh did kaho kiss eriol romantically ?

epic. Please tell me there is a sequel to this!

i love the way you tied the story in with the harry potter books! especially with the mandrakes, i was wondering why they didn't have any full-grown ones during the chamber of secrets... i mean, if a plant like that was so useful surely they'd keep at least a small about of it around! would have liked tiny bit more interaction with golden trio though...

Thanks for this crossover. I never expected that a CCDxHP crossover could work so well. Good job!

Excellent story!

So it's a crossover with the book, huh? I guess it's nice for a change that we're looking through the first book outside Harry's POV. And I don't think Sakura would've been Gryffindor material anyway.

So there's another station aside from 9 3/4's? Or is this not King's Cross Station?

excellent going here, I have nothing to correct either. Had a great time reading this story.

It's an awesome story. I loved the fact you didn't give sakura trillions of new cards (especially a teleport Card, why do ppl make them when the Move card would work just aswell) I also loved the fact it was Only sakura (and kero) coming to hogwarts. I hope a sequil could be put up but the story finnishes on a good note. After all, there arnt many practically resins for her staying in hogwarts for the next couple of years.

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Well, I read it all and I got to say it was nice to see an original spin on the way the story was writen. There were some things that I didn't really feel fit the CCS character's personalities, but they weren't so blatently against their behaviour that it really warrented much more than a "I don't really agree that they would act like that..."

You also made some mistakes in places, such as in the Hufflepuff party scene you wrote Oliver's name in one place where it should have been Cedric's. Also it stated that guys can't go into girl's dorm rooms, so Wayne wouldn't have managed to steal the card.

It would have been nice, seeing as you had Kaho as a prominent person and the only other CCS character attending Hogwarts (even as a teacher) if she would have had more of a part. As it stands, there seems very little that she did in the story that couldn't have been filled by Kero, and most of those scenes that Kero wasn't apropriate for would have easily been filled by a HP teacher instead. It just seems that if you were to go to all the trouble as to write her into the school, she should have had a bigger role.

I also find it a little strange that Sakura never would have mentioned Syaoran's existance to anyone at the school, especially her friends. She's in love with the boy and she's only attending school for his sake, surely she would have mentioned him when talking about her life back in Japan and all her friends there.

Other than that, there's not a whole lot I have to critique. I enjoyed the story well enough, the OC's weren't Mary Sues or anything, and I think it would be worth trying for a sequel if you have one in you. You obviously put enough thought into your storyline to make it worthy of a sequel.

I like this story. It's really neat and very different from the others I saw. I also noticed that you named the chapters like episodes of CardCaptor Sakura. Also, I liked how in one of the earlier chapters you emphasized the way non-Japanese speaking people would pronounce Sakura if they hadn't heard it properly. Will check for that sequel.