This is really good! I like how you gave her a specific reason for loosing her control over emotion, not just the vagueness of Pon Farr setting in early or something, like so many writers (myself included) have done. It was cute! Picture a 16-year old girl, in her pajamas, at 10:17 in the morning, squealing in front of the computer, and that's me. I'm *very* silly. But again, this is really really good, and if you have any more, please bring it out!

This is so cute :)

this was an amazing story... i like the whole idea of the shefar... i think that the pon farr has been used to many times and this gives every thing a whole new perspective... u really need to continue this is turning out the be a really amazing story

That was great...And really sweet..I wish they would develop a relationship on the show...Now you know that greatness should come in large amounts so please continue to write great works..

I really enjoyed this story. I hope you plan to write more describing their relationship after this incident.

I was expecting another Pon Farr story when I read this, but I like this new concept. I'm a big fan of original concepts, and I like this one.

I really liked your concept. Very original.

Wow! That was really touching. Is there any chance that we'll get to read about what happens when everything has blown over and how their relationship changes?

Your story left me tingly; the T&T interaction felt just right. The language

you chose suited the delicate situation. Nicely done!