   ForeverFallen76 11/18/11 . chapter 2So far, this story is great! LOL! I love a good lemon scene like anyone else, but if I wanted porn, I'd go to a different site, you know? So, with that said, find a villain or some kind of confrontation that will threaten either all of Konoha, or the girls and his future children. This way, the scenes that do have lemons will be better when they're read. You know. Like if you eat your favorite meal 24/7, it loses its appeal as your favorite. But, if you only have it once in awhile or on special occasions, it'll always be your favorite and taste better than it did the last time you had some.
I do feel bad for Naruto though. For several reasons. One, he's basically screwing his grandmother. Well, not really, but he's going to be having a child with his grandmother, so that's rather disturbing for someone of Naruto's nature. Two, the Civilian Council, as I assume the Ninja Council already knows he'd never leave or betray Konoha, after making his first thirteen years of life a living hell and wanting him dead or out of the village, are now trying everything they can to keep him in said village. Since I assume that they Fourth Great Shinobi War is over and Madara, Kabuto, and Sasuke are dead. Thus, making Naruto the strongest ninja in the world, correct?
So, I assume you see the irony of this situation as well. They are never satisfied when it comes to him. First, they want him dead. When that won't happen, they want him out of the village. He saved Konoha from destruction several times since being born, and now they are worried that he might leave Konoha because he has nothing tying him down to said village. Well, you know what, its their own damn fault! They should have respected the final wishes of his father and listened to the words and orders of the Sandaime to begin with! Do they believe that the Shodai would have allowed this to happen? Hell know! He would have told them where to shove it. And if they pressed the issue, he'd have them forced out of the village or killed for what they were trying to do to the poor guy; again!
So, I think that Tsuande should be more than forceful in regards to the Council as a whole. If they are worried about Naruto leaving, that's their own fault! They should have respected the Fourth's Dying Words and not listened to a hate and war-mongering fool instead of their common sense. And the Shinobi Clans didn't do that much to hlp the boy either!
Anyways, great chapter and I look forward to your next update. Until then. later. |
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