Coming from a person who read the novel and seen all three versions of the film. This is coming from a publisher's point of view. All in all this isn't too shabby, the novel is hard to match in terms of the style and story because Richard Matheson broke a lot of new ground when he wrote it. You did okay here but I am going to send you an invitation via e-mail about a proposition about getting published as a writer. You got the skills with a borrowed subject matter, but can you do it with your own work?

That's good. Nice job writing this story.

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Great Job! I like how you wrote what previously happened. It reminds you what you have already read.

That's so good. Thanks for updating.

So far so good, please update soon.