I thought Chisame couldn't see. Or did I miss something? Meh. Good idea! I like it so far.

Nice! :)

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I think that the little Chinese martial artist girl's name is Ku Fei, not Fei Ku. Plus, she is Baka Yellow of the Baka Rangers, not Dummy Yellow of the Dummy Force. You might want to fix this.

New fashions and an encounter with possible competitors! Intriguing!

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A thousand apologies for the late review!

I'm guessing big trouble in a new world - ep! ;

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Next up...the games.

You know who would make a nice cameo or maybe be one of the chicks who equips them with their discs and stuff? Cortana from Halo. I don't play Halo much, but I know she'd be perfect for the part. Keep up the good work, this story is pretty interesting.

This is gonna be awesome, I can tell. I don't know much about Black Whole so I'm going to have to look that up to see the references you put in. Seems like this story is off to a good start.

Now all four of them are in the Grid and now they have to face the games.

Renton as in Renton Thruston?

Another interesting chapter once again! :D

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In they go, to the Grid!

Interesting addition of characters and references! :D

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This is gonna be interesting on how they get in the Grid.

Other than some grammatical errors, nice development into the story! Especially some leading events into Mahora!

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Combining Elements of the Matrix huh? Cool.