|Reviews for Darkness Within|
| Starship Artisan 6/29/11 . chapter 28
That was a great story! Very well written, hectic and very cute with humorous moments mixed in (I enjoyed the fact that Ed and Truth were playing chess XD)
Excellent job, I have already started on the sequal!
| Otakumom2 4/13/11 . chapter 28
* GLOMPS*I read 21-28 all at once, and I just gotta say that I love you. I mean it. :D Everything of yours that I've read is awesome, and I wish to have your skills (and drive/will to write) someday. Poor Ed always takes one for the team, and the little RoyXRiza moments made my day! Not to mention the AlXMei cuteness and all the lovely EdXWin. Also, the action scenes are always great. 3
| Confusedrambler 4/13/11 . chapter 28
So, Fanfiction exploded right after I left you that review for Chapter 27. Unfortunately, I didn't know it at the time. So I spent about half an hour typing out a lovely review for you before pressing the giant submit button. Needless to say, that failed and completely erased all my gushing ramblings. I spent the next hour crying in a corner with my mushroom friends. (Well, okay, that might be a *tad* exaggerated, but you get my point.) So, I've built up my courage and decided to tackle this thing again. Especially since no one has been decent enough to leave you one since my last visit. I'm warning you now though, I'm being lazy and not putting nearly as much effort into this one...sorry. Phew...ok, here we go!
The scene between Ed and Winry is hideously adorable. I almost died of cute.
I thought I smelled a plot with a possessed Al (or something like that) but since 8 months pass (apparently without incident) I'm guessing not. I might write a little fic for myself just to satisfy my odd desire to have something bad happen to Al.
Ed gets a job back in central and is allowed to bring Winry with? While Winry is a crazy, emotional person and Roy and Riza are finally together? I'm having sudden visions of Ed pissing her off and getting sent away. He finds himself at Roy's place and is scarred for life when he interrupts Roy while he's busy...entertaining Riza. Cue major awkwardness and naughty jokes in between bouts of uncontrollable laughter.
Love the appearance of Gracia and Elycia. They sent the 'cute' meter up another couple notches. Seriously, you're killing me here. Not that it's not a pleasant way to die, but I'm not quite ready to go yet. :P
The hospital scene. Genius. Pure genius. And that little conversation about Roy and Riza's kid(s)? Priceless. I'm thinking that Van and their kid get together for a play date. Van attempts to transmute one of his/her limbs into automail. The other kid sets fire to the house and burns down half the neighborhood. Chaos ensues as the hapless fathers are forced to stop the alchemy fight by their highly irritated wives. Ah, I can see it now!
In other news...It's Ling! And he's just as hopeless as ever! Hooray! :D
A great ending to a wonderful story. Congratulations on another success! And like I said, I'm writing you a nice, long review because you deserve it after working so hard on this thing. Well, I get the feeling I forgot to mention several things, but as I'm feeling lazy, I'll just leave it at that. So thanks for sharing your story with all of us. :)
| Confusedrambler 4/11/11 . chapter 27
Filler? Eh, maybe just a little. But it's necessary to tie up all the loose ends and move on with the story, so I have no problem with it.
Ah, so many funny/interesting little tidbits tucked away in this chapter. Accidentally destructive Al, Ed actually trying to outsmart the Truth (and trying to stay still for more than 5 minutes without a book to read), Havoc *finally* getting a date...yep, it's full of some really good stuff.
But even though you've got all this great stuff happening, this chapter just isn't my favorite. I have no idea why...Meh, I'll just go read the next chapter now. (My internet has been acting up, so sorry for not reviewing sooner... T.T)
| LightMyBulb 4/8/11 . chapter 27
Ed was playin chess with God XD
| queen of magicians 4/7/11 . chapter 27
sooo many chapters so quickly..sooooooo awesome!
| Confusedrambler 4/7/11 . chapter 26
Another wonderful chapter by the lovely Heachan!
So...you were seriously gonna just leave us all hanging! D: What about Ed? Will Al's plan fail? Will Edward ever learn how to do the perfect handstand? Will he go insane from boredom? Will he ever get out of the gate? And will Havoc ever manage to get a girlfriend? These are the burning questions that keep me awake at night...and I thank you for deciding to answer at least a few of them by continuing on with this story. And to anyone who wants this story to end sooner rather than later? You're crazy. This is good stuff.
In other news, I'm loving the scene with Roy, Havoc, and Riza. Their little conversation about having a girlfriend and Havoc's sad (but completely expected) rejection were probably my favorite parts of this update. I will say that it kinda had the feel of a 'filler' chapter, but I don't think I mind that too much. Looking forward to the next chapter!
| Joker Oak 4/6/11 . chapter 25
Well, if you want reviews Hea, here is one. I expect an epilogue and Ed escaping the gate. Dammit if you don't do that there will be a lot of disappointment and outrage my I add.
I look forward to seeing more and see where you take it, sequels never go amiss either you know?
| Confusedrambler 4/5/11 . chapter 25
Aww. It's ending already? (Pfft. 25 Chapters and I still want more. Ridiculous. You must be really good. But then, you already knew that. xD)
May and Winry's bonding moment? Cute. Very cute. Roy and Riza's conversation at the end of the chapter? Freakin adorable. Not to mention Ed's amusing antics in the Gate.
Speaking of Ed, I see you didn't let him cop out of the equivalent exchange thing. Nicely done. Hmm. So is Al going to use the stone to get him back or not? I suppose I'll have to wait and see.
Ah, and just because I love him so, I must say something about Havoc. Havoc...I love your smart mouth and your blatant disregard of the rules when they apply to smoking. Eh, that's pretty much all I've got to say, so until next time. :P
| Confusedrambler 4/3/11 . chapter 24
Ah, Royai...how I love it! That was a very nice moment between the two of them, and despite what you and Roy may believe, I completely agree that he would use her stay in the hospital as an excuse to bring her flowers. Just cause behind that arrogant exterior, he's a very sweet guy who cares way too much about his subordinates. I suppose that's why we all love him so much. .
I liked the fight scene again. The panda statues were a very nice touch. (Pfft. Ed, we all know you're taste is just as bad. Even if I personally like your taste xD)
Heheh, Roy finally gets to torch Ed! Uh...I mean Pride. Yep, totally what I meant. Too bad for Ed that Pride's stone fell out when it did. Another minute or so and he could've avoided a stay in the hospital. Oh, well. Sucks for him, but I'm looking forward to it. xD
Ah, the gate. So many...er...not so fond memories there. I'm kinda wondering how Ed's gonna get back out of the gate unscathed...Perhaps he'll just offer Pride's stone as trade? Otherwise, I think our boy's gonna have to lose another arm or something. See, if you think about it...If the gate really did take Pride away, wouldn't Ed need to pay with something else as well? Especially since it would actually be doing him a favor? The gate doesn't do favors. Equivalent exchange only...so what could be worth enough to both get rid of the homunculus and allow Ed to go back to Amestris? Hmm. Interesting question. I shall think on it. More than likely, you're just gonna stick with the whole 'he pays with the stone' thing. Eh, doesn't matter to me either way. I'm just kinda typing aloud, I suppose. (Somehow I don't think that's the proper way to say that, but it's all I've got for now, so I'm sticking with that.)
Yes. I'm having a love affair with you over the internet. Because I have no idea who you are, and yet, I love you with the burning intensity of 1000 suns (or maybe just 1000 Roys) xD All joking aside, you're story is great, and I think this probably counts as a review. So, here ya go. Have fun reading the little bugger.
| Joker Oak 4/3/11 . chapter 24
You've most definitely attacked the benchmark with this chapter, and though I think the next one or two could very well end up being the last, I could be proved wrong.
I can see this story being extended to cover what happens in the eventuality that Pride is exorcised shall we say. I shall be most interested to see where you go next.
I'll be watching.
| Confusedrambler 4/2/11 . chapter 23
Wheeeee! Ed got control for a little bit! And now Pride's 'bout to get his butt kicked! Woohoo! Extreme abuse of exclamation points due to unbridled excitement! :D
| Punker88 4/2/11 . chapter 23
Yay! That was very fun to read. :D I can't wait to see what's going to happen.
| Im The Sweet 4/1/11 . chapter 22
i love fullmeatal Alcemist but i've always found it hard to get into its fan fiction. this fic, wow, i'm really into this. took me about 3 days to get to chapter 22. i can't wait to see what happens to Ed next
| queen of magicians 4/1/11 . chapter 22
look out Pride. The mini Panda will get you!