|Reviews for fanfic of a fanfic: Dauntless|
| mi 11/14/11 . chapter 2
well written. I want more. pretty please?*puppy eyes
| Moons-Chan 11/6/11 . chapter 2
No matter how serious the issue is, I find Lelouch way of asking guards to escort Soresi away to be executed to be abruptly humorous! He just has the way to surprise everybody!
| ariel stormcloud 5/29/11 . chapter 2
| Tracer 4/4/11 . chapter 2
I really liked this fanfic so can you please add another chapter?
| ndesi62 3/12/11 . chapter 2
Great chapter! I love your characterization of Edith, and that Kewell was knocked down a peg like that. Though I have to say, I'm not sure that Lelouch could just execute him like that, so easily. Even a Prince has his limits when it comes to nobles.
Anyway, great stuff, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
| blackash 2/23/11 . chapter 2
I'm loving your little vignettes! The fact that this was from Edith's pov makes it even better.
Also, considering how much everyone seems to like dear Abigail, you might consider a one-shot of all the ways she attempts to enter the country. ;)
By the way, this line: "She wondered how they would react if they knew she was half number." Totally made me want to shout "Good Lord! She's a fraction!"
| Allora Gale 2/17/11 . chapter 2
. I know you said you were going to update it on the weekend, but I forgot until just now. Sorry! I was hoping to be your first reviewer again. I'll put it on alert so it doesn't happen again.
I kept waiting for Suzaku to pop out and be like ". . . Yeah . . . hey." because that would have been interesting and hilarious.
I also like that you wrote from Edith's pov. I suppose since this is a fanfiction of a fanfiction it makes her a canon character . I'm always leery of writing from an OC's pov lest they suddenly turn into a mary sue (my early writings are almost painful in this respect). But this was good. I think you'll like the next chapter as it has an even better delving into Edith's thoughts on Lelouch.
As for Lelouch's response to the Purists . . . you were off. Simply executing Kewell would be letting him off too easy. :D
Also lol at Abigail sneaking in on a boat. Oh and this line: "Prince Lelouch vi Britannia, Eleventh Prince and Sevent-, pardon me, Sixteenth in line for Throne" is great. I have something similar planned for a future conversation.
Thanks for writing this. Please sir, can I have another? .
| Queen of everything pineapple 2/15/11 . chapter 2
wow. i'm surprised you can actually leech of another fanfic, sneaky. :)
| maximorph1 2/14/11 . chapter 2
i don't know, the execution seems a little rushed. There was no build up other than kewell disobeyed an order. Frankly, Lelouch tends to not spend lives that easily. Well, it's your story.
The biggest flaw is that you assume others have read Dauntless. I have, but someone who hasn't will be lost.
Granted, this is a fanfic of a fan fic, but you need to give details. Not to mention, there was a huge gap between chapters without any transition. Not trying to be mean, but these flaws should be fixed for a better story
| Slices 2/14/11 . chapter 2
Good chapter, again.
| Ragez 2/14/11 . chapter 2
I liked the story, but execution seems like a pretty harsh punishment. I thought Lelouch would just give him 30 years or so in jail
| Worker72 2/14/11 . chapter 2
Of course who knows perhaps Kewell might escape his fate like Bartley did in cannon and have the 2nd prince commute his sentence. Not likely I know but still possible.
| Poison's Ivy 2/13/11 . chapter 1
Dude, you should TOTALLY continue the first one (from The Banquet); I loved it. :D
| SeigZeon 2/13/11 . chapter 2
huh but you r a pretty good author too :D
hahaha sorsi good Bye xD
aww i like abigail
nice chapter :D
| Melchor 2/13/11 . chapter 2
Nicely done! I really like how you present these one-shots, and they seem to fit in seamlessly with the original story. Only thing that I want to pick at: isn't Lelouch the 11th prince, and 17th in line to the throne? There are princesses, like Cornelia, who are ahead of him. Otherwise, I like it.