Love it Really original too

Great written! :)

Crystal

I really enjoyed this story, especially how Jane was so laid back and forward like in this moment:

"Don't fight it," she whispered in my ear. "I know you feel it. It's okay, I do too."

I liked the Alice in Wonderland notes at the end of story too :)

One thing that I would change to minimize confusion when reading is to add a chapter break between when they fall asleep and when they wake up as it was easy to read it as if not much time had passed.

I liked the emphasis being on the coffee shop not being a cookie-cutter chain (although the name for some reason didn't scream 'small business' to me either).

I think you might have one of my votes, but I haven't read them all so not completely sure yet... ;D

Thanks for writing!

very sweet, good luck in the contest!

Coffee, cupcakes, and love notes! The ending made me all giggly. I'd love to read more of this story.

It was a nice change, to see Jane portrayed as something other than a hateful bitch; but a sweet and passionate girl. Lovely story, liked it very much!