Well it has potional I'll give you that.(-:

You might want to give the readers more details or something but still intersting.

It's intersting but confusing to 're font isn't showing up there's a trick with need to save it under web page are something like that to have italics and bold to be shown.

Off to the next chapter.

Interesting. Not entirely sure I followed everything, but then i hardly ever do!

Gonna keep reading, if you keep writing. I see good things happening with this!