I have a question. Is this some alternate dimension or something?

Cuz, you know, Chauncey is a baby before, during, and after the game, not to mention a portrait.

Wait isnt chancey the baby

this is a very good story and i can't wait for the next one thing i dont like is that the chapters are really short. if you can add more to the story and make the chapters longer your story will be really good.

I will say one thing, I disagree with your other reviewer. Yes, you do need a little practice, but it's your first fic!

(In background) Yeah... Mine would be weird but May-bay doesn't even let me write anything.

That's not true. You told me you hated writing.

(In background) Still.

Anyway, for your first fic I understand the little mistakes. However, I'll still stay and read anyway, because I'd like to see where this goes. -

All I can say is that you definitely need a Beta or take lessons.

Not more too say.