Bravo! (Insert applause here) I would definitely watch this if it was a movie, even if it was a 6-hour epic. I'd just watch it in sections :P
The only mistakes I found were a few typos (ie: "pistil" instead of "pistol") but other than that you tied up all of the loose ends and really made your own story out of Borderlands, one that had me guessing and at the edge of my seat constantly. Thanks for the adventure and good luck in all of your future endeavors! :D

I loved this so much and your script writing is quite well executed! It has given me many ideas and the way you pieced everything together was beautiful. I would be very interested if you made another on the events of Borderlands 2, and perhaps even the events between the two. Other from that, Great work!

This has been an awesome adventure! Thank you very much for writing it :)

I really like how you worked with the format! Makes it very interesting.

No offense or anything but couldn't you have just tried to novelise the book instead of making it look like a draft script for a movie?

i loved this chapter! it's so sad it's going to end soon ç.ç

I'm not a fan.
It looks like it has an utterly amazing idea, and storyline. I just can't read the script format.
I can promise that I'd follow this regularly, if it were in a normal story format. As it is, though. I just can't read it. It doesn't grab my attention.

Mordecaiiiii how could you? I know that he can't be serious... Either that or he's going to change his mind. Poor Lillith! She actually was warming up to him, too. And what happened to Bloodwing? He better come back :'( lol I actually feel worse for Bloodwing than Lillith. I love that bird 3

This story is great. Your ability to make words turn into vivid pictures in my mind is nothing short of spectacular. It actually feels like a movie. I also like how you've taken the plot of borderlands and turned it into more of a movie-esque type of plot. Looking forward too mordecai's reaction that they're still alive and the groups counter-reaction. Update soon.

Eh... OK. So First off. Screen writing DOES NOT need individual eye adjustments or emotions or changing gazes. It is a ACTION by ACTION shot. No emotion only big movements. Leave the subtleties to the actors. Also: Describe the scene !

Holy crap! :o I never saw any of this coming. What was Mordecai thinking?

All I can say after reading this chapter is:

Well, shit.

When I reached the end of Chapter 13, I was hoping I wasn't seeing the end of the page! NOO! I cannot wait for the next chapter! Awesome job!

Yay Bloodwing! He's such a boss :P
Why do I have a feeling that Tannis actually sent them to the Vault? And Mordecai is gonna be so mad when he figures out what the "teleporter" really does...

I'm digging this story so much! I'm enjoying the subtle hints between Mordecai and Lilith, especially given the history you applied to Mordecai. It's also nice to see someone not rushing to hook the pair up and honestly your approach has waned my skepticism on fanfics since a lot try to apply thick eroticism to characters. You haven't which I praise and praise again! Curious where you might take things, a little fearful you might go down a weird path with them but I'll keep reading none the less.

I'd love to see this in an anime style or CGI as I think using real life actors might spoil the images of the characters a bit much. This is purely fan fiction, but it'd be cool of Gearbox got a chance to look at the story and maybe fine tune it a bit with you to fit more closely to the history of the actual game and turn it into an actual movie. Would be so epic, and probably stroke the hearts of many o' Borderland lovers.

Anyway I'm rambling, but I think your story is fantastic and this is just my feedback! I eagerly await your next chapter! And intend to get many more hooked on this story .