Yay I love this story am so happy you updated! Great job:)

THIS WAS SO GOOD ALL OF IT I LOVE IT CANT WAIT FOR MORE!

oooooohhhhhhhhhh.*Fan girl scream* cant wait for some ROMANCE!

please continue this! this just got me, i need moar XD

This is really good. I love Dawn, (Fresians are my fav horse breed) she's got so much character, and reminds me of a horse I rode in my old riding school. That old mare understood everything you said to her, and she didn't put up with any crap, lol.

Keep up the good work, can't wait for the next chapter :D

Story seems so far seems interesting enough, especially with ocss for all the guys. Hope you continue this story.

Heyhey,

Oooh, I'm so glad to see a story with pairings for the other guys too! I've sort of been waiting for that, you know. :3 I've seriously never had a game in which I liked ALL the main guys to this extent. Gosh, I'm such a fangirl, and the game isn't even out yet.

Hmm, but until now, only one main OC (Heaven) has been introduced, right? Or two, if Drake is going to be one too. So we still got some mystery characters that haven't been introduced yet?

As for criticism.. well I have a few small points that bother me a bit. For instance, the mare that can understand human language. Sorry, but that just seems unfitting in my opinion. The ride of choice in Final Fantasy is usually a Chocobo, which can also understand human speech. So why wouldn't you go for that if Heaven is to have a pet animal?

Furthermore, I may be a bit of a hypocrite for saying this because my grammar isn't always top-notch either, but I did spot some mistakes.

With that being said, I do hope you will update soon :)

Lady Midday