| Reviews for Revelations |
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Blue Phoenix 10/4/09 . chapter 1 I was so pleased with this story! It's perfectly believable, and reflects what I think the two might be feeling; they're just not able to connect somehow. Glad they each got the push! Well written and a pleasure to read... I want more! Blue Phoenix |
Reinamarie Seregon 1/18/09 . chapter 1It is so sweet! i love it, want to continue? She's the only human girl to accept him flaws and all. I don't understand why she married Wulfgar, coz both humans? it is possible for human and elf to be tog. |
Lola Witherbottoms 11/11/05 . chapter 1I only skimmed this 'cause I'm in study hall and the bell's gonna ring; very well-written. I love a good story about Drizzt and Catti-brie's relationship. Please keep writing! |
Eladriewen 8/10/03 . chapter 1Not very good? I thought it was great! You're pretty good with this romance stuff, at least between Drizzt and Catti-brie. I could never do romance. *shrugs* Some people are lucky like that. Anyway...this is fantastic! You should write more like this! P.s. I too am obsessed with Drizzt. [looks to the muse on her shoulder that is actually a 3 inch tall Drizzt Do'Urden] this is Mini Drizzt! Say hello Mini Drizzt! [Mini Drizzt waves] Lol, sorry. I'm insane. _ Great story though! |
Surreptitious Chi X 4/27/02 . chapter 1You're right about how Drizzt acts. Talking too much and second guessing himself and everyone around him. Sometimes that drives me absolutely crazy. *sigh* But that doesn't mean I don't like him. |
Tyr1 4/2/02 . chapter 1Oros and blushes at Lunadrows comment* |
LunaLillium 4/2/02 . chapter 1Of course It'll be Cattibrie who tires of it, and gets things done. I mean, this drow is as virgin as they get! (But then, everyone knows that the shy ones are the most naughty, once someone gets through the defences). And this guy has not had any for like, seventy years! *almost horrified on Cattibire's behalf by the conclusions that follow from that fact - then again, maybe just envious...* *snicker* |
DrizztThe Lazy Ass Who Won't Login 3/25/02 . chapter 1 So, SL Smith, are you saying the rest of my stories suck? *Makes wounded noise* I'm never writing anything again! Just kidding. The difference between you and that other bastard is that you COMPLIMENTED my first (I think). And you didn't... bell rang... more later. |
smith 3/24/02 . chapter 1"This took me about 20 minutes to write, so it's not very good." I beg to differ. I think it's the best story that I've read of yours so far. You have improved. Though I've said this before, you write the Catti-Brie accent well. You should maybe spend another 20 minutes on this story, and re-write one of the sentences. The sentence, "He'd go find Catti-Brie and make her happy by telling her he was staying," needs some more work done on it. 'He'd go find Catti-Brie' is a bit too slangy, and would be okay if it were dialogue but it isn't. 'and make her happy,' is a bit flat. Drizzt isn't just making Catti-Brie happy, he's also making himself happy. He isn't making her happy, he's making them both happy. You nicely built up to Drizzt realising that he loved his Catti-Brie, and the kissing scene was nice, but this sentence doesn't do the rest of the story justice. That sentence was the big moment when he decided that he wanted to stay in Icewind Dale, that he wanted to stay with Catti-Brie, that he truly loved her and wanted to be with her for the rest of her life, and that sentence doesn't quite have the emotional impact that it should. That sentence must be re-written. That sentence must die. I know you were badly flamed by somebody in one of your reviews, and I hope I haven't caused you any offence by writing this. I hope you do a re-write of that sentence. I hope you drag that sentence into your garden and kill it with an axe. Anyway, keep on writing, keep on improving. |
Salak 3/24/02 . chapter 1 I thought it was great! of course, I think everything you write is great. :) |
tyr 3/23/02 . chapter 1 Hey! I thought it was good! A nice little before bed snack. Mmmm. Drizzt. We Drizzt fans have to stick together. Are you making any plans to write more Drizzt stuff? (hopefull eyes) or something else? let me know! byes |
Lady Serpentine 3/23/02 . chapter 1Very good thoughts. But why didn't you make him run away and collide with my night elf Marisa? *growls at Catti-brie* She's ruining everything. |
Liriel 3/23/02 . chapter 1 More good stuff! Please write more along this story line. Thxs! |