 Wanna Be Formal 2/24/11 . chapter 5These are all very well done. There were a few instances where the flow was a little halting in the first few chapters, but you've grown into the feeling of the stories, and I can appreciate the way that makes the little drabbles come along. Though the rafiks were just a tad too jovial, you've portrayed them well, in spirit of the prompt. You might consider adding a situation bringing to light perhaps a darker side of the older rafiks, to balance out the characters, but I understand that that probably wouldn't fit too well with the tone you've set. Overall, well done. I look forward to future installments. |