AWESOME CHAPTER! CAN'T WAIT TO READ THE SEQUAL! *goes to Sequal*

Hello there,

I play DCUO like it's the end of the world and I love it. This story had me grabbing my controller a few times. lol. Very interesting. I really enjoyed the concept of it.

I am thinking of doing a story based on one of my own toons but timing is everything.

Hope you continue with another.

JrB

Fantastic work! One of the best I've seen so far! A few person and grammar errors here and there, but the first person works so well that only the people that can recognize an error a mile away (Me and a few other fanfic critics.) could notice it! Overall fantastic. ***** (5 Stars)

Hi, I play DC Universe and will one day make a story. But, I'm not here to talk about that! I'm here to tell you great job with the story. I absolutely loved it! I'm on my way now to read your other stories :) keep writing on

This is really good so far. I love the image of superheroics gone wrong, especially when heroes discover that they have powers. I look forward to your story.

This was a very nicely written story about experiences of a new hero. :) greaat job.

If this ends here, I have to say this is definitely the best DCUO fanfic I have seen and easily one of the best stories I have read EVER. The writing is amazing, the story is compelling, the characters you created are incredibly detailed and fun to read about and original. I could go on, but I think you get the point. This one as made it's way into my favorites and you as an author have just gained another subscriber. Congratulations and I hope you keep writing stuff this good.

Two thumbs up for this chapter.

This was an awesome chapter! Thanks for updating! Seeing this makes me want to update my own FanFic! great job!

I loved this chapter. And what made me really happy was that I had just finished that same mission that you described in the story the day before. So in short: Cool story bro, you should tell it at parties.

This is a great story. Please keep it up.

This is a great story. You're a wonderful story teller and this only needs a few edits to get it up to tip-top shape. I love that Rachel is a fully realized person, and that she already has those catch-phrases we all develop as we get older.

A few things I would note is to look out for adding a word twice, making mistakes with remember which character is doing the action and where they are. There's also some words missing entirely, as well as possessive's and verb-noun agreement issues... but overall this is one of the best DCUO stories in this small collection. I cannot wait to read more!

Wow. This is really well written. Awesome story please continue it. I can't wait to read more. Thank u so much for writing and sharing :-)

There really are not that many DC universe stories, 10 I think including this one. This is by far the best keep up your great writing and keep churning out good stuf!

Update Soon!

AHHHH thanks for uploading! this chapter was great! AS ARE ALL OF YOUR CHAPTERS!