That was actually pretty darn good, not a lot of mistakes at all. It had a nice build. It was cute in a way too. Well done ;)

its a really good plot line. would you mind if i borrowed it. it would be different. but you know still be placed in a school. its really good tho. i wrote one in this formate too. i think its kinda sad tho cuz lucy dies. but shoot me a message back, id love to talk more about this :)