|Reviews for Four Breaths|
| LateNightAlumni 3/5/11 . chapter 1
Well written. Insightful. D
| shelter 3/2/11 . chapter 1
One of the few Claymore fics that seamlessly blends poetry and prose without getting too pretentious. Brilliant work.
Well, maybe there are some things that you didn't exactly cover. Ophelia's backstory has been done to pieces by fanfiction writers, so I wonder why you choose to drill deeper into her history? Why Ophelia when, minus the brother and the number four, a poem decontextualized poem can be used for any female character in Claymore.
Perhaps it would've been more fitting if you properly elaborated every single aspect of the poem. The connection between Ophelia and serpents isn't very clear, and neither is connection between her and a vague love that her brother mentions.
Still, I love the detail you use to describe Ophelia. It compliments my knowledge of her as a fearsomely mad warrior and, yes, makes her less than mad and more than human here.
(Mind the LJ cut at the end of your story. If you do write Claymore often on LJ, I'll be glad to give feedback).