i like the way you portrayed his thoughts. especially when you phrsed yuki as "someone whose wants and needs were so random". very nice, and the heartbreak you conveyed at the end is very good too.

Yay. Shuuichi has a hard time with Yuki. Next fic.

Wait...isn't Yume Kamo Shirenai a Fushigi Yuugi song? XD Okay that's off-topic. Well this is a vicious first fic you've got here. Well written and cute pairing!

Hiro's such a sweetheart... and he is more consistent than Yuki - but will Shuichi EVER give up on Yuki? Knowing Shuichi, somehow I don't think so. Liked it lots! Write more!

LOVE IT,LOVE IT,LOVE IT,LOVE IT,...

need to say more hmmm?.._...

::sniff::

Hiro is definitely on my list of bishes to glomp and cuddle with...

great fic, especially on your first attemp!