This was an amazing story! The description in this story is wonderful, and the imagination and feeling behind the story is strong and powerful. You did an excellent job. )

wow u made me cry for some reason part of me thinks she should have stayed dead the sorrow was powereful enough to end it there but everyone loves a happy ending! well done belongs in the labyrinth section but well done!

excellant story so far great cliff hanger but i have a little consructive critism for u i hope its condstructive anyhow im not sure there is a such word as drug in this context at least, also there are a lot of continuous

Jareth...

Sarah...

Jareth...

Sarah...

type lines

You also often switch tenses at confusing times if it supposed to be characters thinking it needs to be clearer and lastly Jareth gets a bit out of character e.g "you guys" im sorry but i find that a bit iffy! right on 2 part two im loving this story