Wow you are amazing at this!

I must say that this is a great fan fiction. Better than most of the others I have seen, but then again they weren't about SotC. Great idea, and you seem to be pulling it off well. :D

There were a few grammar errors here and there, but otherwise a great style so far.

It makes me feel bad for killing the colossi in the game ;_;

Awesome job so far, and keep it up. :D

So far, so good. Keep it up!

This is a very creative story and I very much enjoy it. I know I'm late with this review but could you please continue to write about the other Colossi, the next one would be interesting. Also what you've written so far fits the game plot very well because this is a confusing game, I never understood it, but still, please continue, you came up with a great idea and that idea should be finished.

It's an interesting premise, and Ive enjoyed it. However, I don't think your Dormin lines up with my idea of him. Where as you see him as maliciously evil, I see him as more like an honest evil. He doesn't decieve Wander into doing these things, and he is truly honest in what he does. He states that the boy will have to sacrifice much to save his love, and the boy does. Dormin also holds up his end of the bargain while reviving Mono. The demon doesn't seem so much villainous as truthful. Hope that made sense...

wow..I love it..the style the idea the backstory you have created

For someone who hasn't played the game, it's decent. I've heard this same kind of idea pitched from others before, but with a newcomer to the game at the lead, things will probably go differently.

I look forward to how you may take this.