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Jander Panell 10/26/11 . chapter 1
The only reason I got back into GX in the first place and decided to give the final two season a try was because of Judai/Yubel.

Wonderful fanfics like this are part of the reason why I ship it in the first place.
Xaipa 9/18/11 . chapter 1
You sir write the best YubelxJudai fics in the internets. I seriously have nothing to aside from that because that is just so rare and amazing in itself.
General Herbison 5/3/11 . chapter 1
I read somewhere that Yubel was a girl in her previuos life,then something changed her into looking like a boy then she became her new from and was female in mind but her body was split. Personally I just think of her as a female. Great story
Shadow 3/20/11 . chapter 1
Well... this is interesting... But a little grammar mistakes that I believe is wrong... Here we go:-

1. irritating in the twinkling of an eye. "I like it when you yell at me because of doing it." should be changed to...

irritating in the blink of an eye. "Because I like it when you yell at me for doing it."

Reason: It sounds better and Yubel asked Why. That's my reason though.

2. "I have…a lesson!" Yubel declared, should be changed to...

"I… have a lesson!" Yubel declared,

Reason: It's very rare to see the ... not at I. Many would put at I, making it I…

3. Whatever the king said to him, though, Yubel knew in his heart, the kiss was worth it. should be changed to...

Whatever the king said to him though, Yubel knew in his heart, the kiss was worth it.

Reason: I believe you don't need a coma ',' twice. Just once after though is enough.

4. Won't do it again. Juudai stared at the lovely creature he held in his hands now. should be change to...

I won't do it again. Juudai stared at the lovely creature he held in his hands now.

Reason: ...I just think you forgotten the I.

5. From the corner of one eye, he saw Daitoukuji-sensei's soul ball emerge from Pharaoh, then get swallowed right back up. should be changed to...

From the corner of one eye, he saw Daitoukuji-sensei's soul ball emerge from Pharaoh, before getting swallowed right back up.

Reason: It sounds better and then's not really good in this sentence.

...That's all I can find...

Advice; try to use less , and more of ;.

Ja ne.
KyoxSakiFan 3/12/11 . chapter 1
I AM AMUSED.

SO VERY AMUSED.

But you should know that I would be by now. xD

Sorry, I didn't review this sooner..I went to read this when it came out, but then I had to leave and just now remembered to come back and finish it. D:
9th Shadow Rider 3/11/11 . chapter 1
Love the story, very nice! 1 error I have to point out is the time. Jaden (Juudai's English dub name) mentions it being about 7000 years since there past life. In truth it should be over 10,000 years, as it appears that when Yubel became a duel spirit, there weren't any in existence yet, so Yubel may very well be the 1st duel spirit ever. And since, according to "Waking the Dragons" duel spirits existed 10,000 years ago, their past lifes should be more ancient than that.

BUT STILL, GREAT STORY, ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL.
Miya Mitsuki 3/11/11 . chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading this one-shot a LOT! it's sooooo cool, and I loved it. It's nothing like most of the one-shots I've read.

the scenes were so kawai :) They matched with the series exactly!

Great story, I'm waiting for more of you.
Cstan 3/11/11 . chapter 1
Those were nice and sweet moments between Yubel and Juudai. I enjoyed reading it.

Have a nice day.
Absolute Destinyzero 3/11/11 . chapter 1
...I will admit that I haven't watch all of season 3 and 4 of GX, but this story really makes me wants to enter the SpiritShipping territory... just a little bit.

Anyway, this story is... better than good than most one-shots that I read... How both of them interact with each other time to time... even as they reincarnated, their love for each other can never be separated or broken completely...

...I think I'm getting sappy. Anyway, a very good job.
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