Hi! This is interesting. Please do continue! :)

When is the new chapter going to be put up

nice chapter, I kinda wish Ron and Yori would pop in without warning while Kim is working in the book store and say hi

but I'm not sure what you have planned so I'll let you keep up with what you got

interesting!

please write a lemon soon

Iv noticed somthing that keeps poping up. Ron says Kim needs an "alpha" but at the same time it keeps being implied that Ron IS an alpha, a supressed alpha but still an alpha regardless. Its a little confusing at times casue basicaly its saying Ron is exactly what Kim needs but first he needs to come into his own.

why ruin this with the spear of destiny, do you even know what the spear of destiny is, its the spear that supposedly stabbed jesus why he was on the cross. to add any other mystical weapon and give it to rons future girlfriend is terrible.

i love this story its very good and i've always liked yori more then kim i wish the updates were quicker but i guess its up to you hope to read a new chp soon!

A good story and I couldn't help but like Yori's quieter badassitude for Ron to Kim's more take charge approach as you've pointed out here (also I just liked the idea of a guy girl pair in an action cartoon not being automatically interested in one another and happy as friends even if that is not how it ended). Your overall reasoning for Yori's and Ron's action vs Kim's does make sense and the fact that Ron broke it off with a good reason helps as well. I hope you continue to write.

I like it that your Ron is moving forward and acting like a normal male would around an attractive women who wants him. Not to interested in the Jake and Kim relationship but that's just me.

It will be great to see Ron improve MMP.

I would have to add that Ron did indeed develop some feelings for Yori in "Exchange", further expanded on in "Gorilla Fist."

Then the writers decided to do a 180 and develop the Ron/Kim relationship for some reason, totally scrapping the whole Ron/Yori work they had been building up. Why, I have no idea.

So bravo for doing this!

great story man I LOVE it one small thing though

"Poor Ron-kun he is so easy to teas, but slowly and surely I will make you mine. The redhead had her chance and did not see what she had lost." Yori thought to herself.

the "teas" thing that is the type that people drink I think you may have meant "tease" just a minor misspelling that's all also could you please read and review my stories? thanks

Nice, love the pairing. please you have to update soon, ja ne.

I'm not much fan of Kim Possible, but it is a great story. Update soon.

Good story with a great beginning. I really think you might have somethin here worth exploring. Make sure to kee up th conflict, and keep this interesting! It will be great regardless of what you do, as long as you keep up this kind of story arc.

one quick note- watch your puntuations. I did happen to notice a few spots throughout your piece where you could have broken the sentence down into two or more, and still have the same messae get across, except for being much clearer. So just watch those few run-on sentences, an try to read this back to yourself once you're done. I've found that in the heat of the moment, it might make perfect sense, but after an hur or so, if I look back on it, it seems to be jumping around and not have a fluidity to the flow of the piece.

However, I commend you for a great idea and beginning of story, now just consider this a draft... there's always room for improvement where writing's concerned.

Best of luck to you,

Motofan713