I love your Story so much! im a big ROLO fan and i beg you to please continue this story ive been waiting for an update for so long! i love what you have done to the characters and i really want to read more! please update it would be greatly appreciated!

Love, TorrentStorm

As much as I enjoy this story, I feel that you need to completely revamp it. As it is, it feels more like two completely stories taking place that have only one minor connection between them (Kendall's presence). I mean, Logan/Ororo's relationship issues have almost no impact at all on Kendall and her presence has had nothing, zip, zero impact on their relationship AT ALL! Honestly, why even bring her into this world if you're not going to use her something worthwhile?
And other than her presence, there's nothing else that this story has to tie it all together. You've got Kendall trying to conceal her identity for some ambiguous reason from her 'parents' that really doesn't make any sense at all. You've got Charles and 'James Jr.' who came from a future timeline of her original world to bring her back to where she came from. Honestly, why shouldn't have James Jr. tried actually talking to her instead of just attacking her like that? Obviously doing so has made her paint him as an enemy in her mind. You claim that Kendall is 20, yet she acts more like 12. And if Charles is actually there, why couldn't he just contact her psychically to tell her how to get home? Why go through the charade of trying to kidnap her?
You've got a good idea here, no question. But you seriously need to go back and clean up the storyline and character interactions.

This is a very interesting storry with great Rolo :) I love how you write Kendall and that you extended the idea of Kendall having a younger brother :)

I hope you consider to continue this story. It would be a big loss to the Rolo community if you don't.

Amazing Story! Please UPDATE already :p

This is a lovely look at a possible life for Storm and Logan,I'm really enjoying. Hope you update soon.

I LOVE your story plz update soon. I want to know what happen NeXT! ;-)

excelent history so far. I like it a lot

keep the good work \(_)/

Please update soon :) love it so far

This story is Amazing! Keep it up!

Really good!Keep going!

An interesting chapter. Nice setup by bringing in the future characters.

I won't go into time travel here (because we all know how fun that is), but its cool to see the older, younger Howlett sibling.

Good chapter. Looking forward to how it all plays out.

Very sweet ending.

AWESOME!

I've actually been focusing on the Movie version and thought the comic RoLo side wasn't well populated.

I was pleasantly surprised to find it fleshed out.

What was even more awesome was that my eyes landed on a fic containing Torrent (who is non-existent in the movie fics).

I read through the chapter and found it well written for an opening. Not too much and just enough to pull you in.

Did you know they also had a baby boy in the What If?

I actually wish Torrent was was in the canon, like a Cable type situation but hey.

Anyway looking forward to reading the rest!

Ugh! I'm ripping my hair out right now :( i'm pissed that she's marrying T'Challa, i want them to break up in the comics soooo badly! I'm also almost crying too! The RoLo angst! It breask my heart! and poor Kendall i was already to fist pump on her behalf because i thought they would kiss and express their true love for each other, but then Storm had to be SMART and remember she was engaged! and sadly i'm not in the best of health... i have... i have... i have... a cold! but i'm feeling a little better now though :)anyways update soon!

Wow, this is really good, in fact it achieves the thing I've been trying to fix with my story. I can't seem to be able to link details together in a seamless manner, like yours, instead my comes off as blocky and use excellent vocabulary without confusing the reader and you expertly portray your characters emotions. I would really appreciate it if you could look at my story called, "X-Men: Omega Level Threat" and offer a few pointers.

Another delightful chapter. Poor Jay. He's just being teh suxorz, but itll pass, I mean look at his parents. Battleworld Charles kinda reminds me of ultimate Charles. Gasp! Dr. McCoy knows! But Beast is a good guy, then again Emma will figure it out.

Nooooooooo! Avoidance is bad for RoLo! I'm planning on breaking out some super admantium handcuffs to chain them together until they get naked, and Ororo admits her love. How will Kendall take matters into her own hands and bring her parents together. Storm should have never married the Black Panther. Guy's a pansy