This story has a lot of potential, with some interesting characters and an alright development. However, I strongly suggest you try to find yourself a beta reader. There are a lot of structural problems, spelling errors and grammatical errors that make this story somewhat difficult to follow. I would enjoy reading this once it has improved, I would even be willing to be a beta reader for this story once I am eligible

um im confused. its sorta good but alot is not clear. anway 5 outa 10