In general I liked this a lot, all except one point. Why do you use seen in the italicized sentences where the appropriate past tense word is actually saw? Just me being picky but it does grate a little and damages an otherwise very good bit of writing.
Many Blessings.
Oriondruid, (John).

Beautiful :')

I love this! It's really great, and for the first time ever, I felt sympathy for a Career. Great job! :)

wow.

this is the best one shot i have ever read.

words cannot describe this.

it is A.M.A.Z.I.N.G.

i am completely speechless.

please write more ones shots? YOu are so good at them!

all i can say is wow this is probably the best fan fic i have ever read.

it was like poetry.

wow. I. Love. This.

This. was. AMAZING. I freaking LOVE how you would say "I hope my parents were..." after every paragraph. You are an artist. Keep up the good work. :)

Love ya!

Jasmine