You need to write more! I love Uncas and Alice... Their love is unmatchable!

I really liked the idea, great short story full of emotion. I wish you would've been more consistent with the past/present tense though. Great job!

I loved the added scene. it should've been in the movie. It's so cute and subtle. I love Alice and Uncas and you do a good job writing them! :)

I really enjoyed this first chapter.

Thank you for filling in the blanks. The braid always made me curious. Not there...

and then there it was. Made me wonder if a scene wound up on the cutting room floor.

Had to be. I look forward to your next installment.

PS: Cannot wait for the waterfall scene...

PPS: Any chance you could change the cliff segment?

Another beautiful story:

This is a scene which should have happened in the movie. I always thought if there was anything going on between uncas and alice at the fort. And yes, it could ( or must ) have been something like this.

Ah, that was just gorgeous! Love how you write their interaction, these small but emotionally powerful moments.

Very nicely done. The strong connection between a & u is clear, and yet you place it, very nicely, within a setting/scene that I could picture actually happening in the movie.

I see that you have written many, many stories, which is something I admire and cannot do myself. But, if you have a beta, please use him/her. I found the typos and the (sometimes) odd change of tenses distracting to a story that was so good. Polish it up a bit and it would be perfect.