this is so cuute! i really liked it! keep it up!

that cant be all! really? just as its getting good? PLEASE finish this fic, its so well thought out and realistic, but to end it like that? tragic!

please; finish this story-

is one of the best developed ones about trunks and pan I have read.

Ohh dear! I love it! It's too bad that is not finished yet, I'm looking foward to it : D

P.D: I LOVE the way you put Trunks 3

This was so great, however I am still waiting for the rest of this story to be written and posted. I love the romantic ideals added to this story. On the other hand only one line needs to be corrected! Please do not forget to place proper punctuation in their proper locations. This is a Must do!...

Do not worry too much though, this was a great story so far. Please make sure you try to be more original especially in terms of new characters! Also make sure you do as much research and detail as possible. Be even more descriptive in the story as much as possible! Good luck to you as a writer!

KEEP WRITING... this is a good fiction, just keep on writing

Really enjoyed reading your story...hope it continues:-))