| Reviews for Time and Fate |
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Blackwing-Darkraven 9/28/11 . chapter 8Damn... confused with multiple POVs, but I don't mind, as long as it's worth the long wait |
Black Friday Rule CSO 9/27/11 . chapter 3dio is Out of Character! |
Reviewer not from LU UFFWUH 9/27/11 . chapter 8 The first part was awkward to read. Too much info about Mark. XD Also, the sMicro/sAnmons will be offended because you referred to them as ants. Still, you're getting to the main story, it's just uber slow, paired with your glacial update I don't think the other readers would be able to bear it. Lastly! Show us more Le-*Gets shot by Mary Jane* P.S. Too lazy to log-in. |
Hirume 6/21/11 . chapter 7Hmm... What do you know? I actually found time to read this. Oh, you forgot to place 'Being lazy' in the list... The story is as funny as 'Just normal Girls'... that, and you just gave a clue to why Mark has Aoi... *hehehe* Wow, I didn't know you could be discreet. Well, you get 5 Yen from me from getting the names of the attacks I didn't know. |
Willowwhip 6/3/11 . chapter 7SHUT UP ABOUT ORIGINS! I AM WORKING ON IT! I actually have the first chapter rewritten, but no one has told me to post it, so I'm waiting until chapter 3 is done 8D |
Blackwing-Darkraven 5/23/11 . chapter 7Grabe, you even put more info on the skills... O_O Can't wait for more! |
Satohika358 5/22/11 . chapter 7*thumbs up* yay update :D BTW, doesn't the Nephilim transformation only cost 2 Bars of MP? |
Satohika358 5/17/11 . chapter 6*thumbs up* When's the next update? XD |
Hirume 5/15/11 . chapter 1Hey Sky element! Just passing by. Without mentioning why I don't have stories posted on this site, let me just say I marveled at at the plot, humor, descriptiveness, and creativity of your story. Except that... since it's a first person view and you constantly switch between characters, you sometimes leave us confused as to whose eyes we are looking through. I'm looking forward to seeing L-... The other 'cast'... Well, I guess I have to wait for you to finish this one for that, right? I don't mind, it's one of the only good reads I could find here. Don't leave your readers hanging! _ |
Blackwing-Darkraven 4/19/11 . chapter 5The battle scenes are so epic, man! *thumbs up* At least I discover more about Mark's abilities, and yes, Arme does look similar to Aisha... ; Keep it up! |
Willowwhip 4/18/11 . chapter 5ohai I didn't think your chapter was that short, actually. I like your level of descriptiveness. I think you only had one or two grammatical errors. I look forward to the next chapter. OH! More relationship development pl0x 3 -Willowwhip |
Soranium 4/16/11 . chapter 4Today, I was supposed to post the new chapter. But due to an unlucky twist in fate, and an untimely blackout, my flash drive got fried, and now I have to completely rewrite Chapters 5, 6 and 7 (yes, I write advance chapters.) I am very sorry to say that there will be a lapse in my update scheme. I will do my best to rewrite 5 again today, and hopefully post it not later than tomorrow. Again, I am sorry for the inconvenience. I do hope that writing the 5th chapter again will be easy since I am the one who wrote it in the first place. Please bear with me. I will also attach this message to the 4th chapter for the sake of those who are too lazy to review. |
Willowwhip 4/12/11 . chapter 4More wordshappy readersbetter reviews. XD Prolific authorsexcatic readersdelighted reviews. XD Bottom line, make as many chapters with as many words as fast as you can, you can't go wrong that way |
Willowwhip 4/12/11 . chapter 3were you describing the highlander armor set? 3 anyways, good story. It's a bit rushed, and your OC is a tiny bit Mary-Sue-ish... I really like the skill descriptions XD on the one to four scale of grammar, it gets a 2.5. It doesn't look like you revised, which you need to do because you have lots of grammar errors. They're not as serious as others, but they disrupt flow quite a bit. All around, it's okay. I suggest improving your proofreading skills, or getting a beta. ALSO! I was SO EXCITED to see that you made Sieghart 624.5 years old. My old story (that is going to be deleted and redone) featured Sieghart as 624.5 years old, so if that was a reference :iconiloveyouplz: XD I'm looking forward to updates. -Willowwhip |
Blackwing-Darkraven 4/11/11 . chapter 4Man, the squabble just kept on going... ; Anyway, keep updating! :D |