such a heart warming story. i say you made such a good story i just don't know how you people come up with such good stories

good story;-)

do you plan on making another chapter or is this the only one?

wow this was great do u have anymore like this?

This isn't really fanfiction and is original work since you've said you're not including any characters form the Naruto world and your chapter here shows that. You should be posting this over on fictionpress where original work should be.

Hope this helps.