Wow, this was great!

I'm really picky about my Lily/James fics, since they're my favorite, but this was wonderful! Good concept, and well carried out!

I'm glad you made it into one really long one-shot instead of lots of chapters.

I like how you portrayed Lily and James. They're my favorite HP couple, second only to Hermione and Ron. I love your story. Keep up the good work! :)

I've always loved to read fanfictions about James & Lily, sadly most of the time it annoys me. Some were poorly written and most of the time everything seemed out of character. Yours however, weren't. I love how each character felt real, just like they were in the book. I love how show the progress of James & Lily's relationship. It was a good read, great in fact.

Nice story, but I do have one problem with the final drabble. You mention that Lily had already put Harry to bed, hours after be usually would have been. But canon dictates that James was playing with his wand for Harry and Lily had to take him and run.

Other than that hiccup, a nice story.

I love it! I cant believe that this is your first story, it is so perfect!

I love, love, love this story!

Beautifully written, and overall a wonderful story to read. Great job with this, really. I loved Severus' moments, especially. I thought you captured them perfectly and realistically.