|Reviews for A search for identity|
| MCRDanime 8/24/11 . chapter 3
Please continue. Update soon!
| Rainbowlalaland 4/26/11 . chapter 3
This seems interesting, I can't wait for the next part...I hope it comes out soon.
And yeah like yonet-chan said, Killua does seem a little OOC but it's not that noticeable, I think (probably) the only reason I noticed is because I love Killua so much.
Keep up the good work I hope the next part is out soon
| yonet-chan 4/14/11 . chapter 3
Great chappie! Hisoka seems a little too evil, but I guess he is, so that's alright. You need to be careful because the "girl disguises herself as boy" thing is typical to Mary-Sues. Ricku is probably not one, and she isn't disguising herself, but some people might think she is. I love this story! Please continue!
| SleepyGrayPuppy 4/7/11 . chapter 2
Awesome story! please update it soon. i really would like to know waht happens!
| yonet-chan 4/4/11 . chapter 2
In Japanese, "Ricku" is spelled Riku, and is a common name for both genders. Killua seemed a little OOC, but I assume you know what you're doing and defer to your higher authority. Nice plot bunny! It'll be fun to see where this story goes;)
| KiGaMi99 4/2/11 . chapter 1
So this is your first fanfiction? It's normal if it's a bit awkward at first, I know what it's like XD I'll try to write a lil con/crit, basing on my own experience, cuz my first fanfiction was... well... The heroine is a Mary-sue... an' I've improve a lot, so I regret, and I try to help beginners ... 3
I hope I won't make too many mistakes, I'm French so I'm still learning English, even though it's kinda good XD
"But your just way out of my league" I don't understand, is "way out" an expression, or is it "you are just way out of my league?"
"I'm a GIRL! Having short hair is also common for girls!" Haha! XD That makes me laugh XD It's not common to write about girls OC looking like boys, I like the idea XD
The dialogue was so cute, but you can add more description, it will make it more .. hmm... *searches for an English adjective* lively? *dies* "
Sometimes too, you switch tenses. I like how I'm able to spot it, but unable to correct it myself XD I make that mistake too 3
Sooo, overall, it sounds like a nice story, I wanna read what happens next XD I can't really really criticize it, it was good, except for the things I spotted above. I like your writing style, it's easy ti understand, yet various and fluent 3
PS: I might be slow at reviewing your story, don't worry, I also have to read other stories...
| Rainbowlalaland 4/1/11 . chapter 1
It was pretty good, just a little tip, you should go back and add a line between your message and the start of your story. For some people little things like that can be a turn off for a story.
And even though it's a little short I think it's really good and I can't wait for the next part to come out.
| zebra-scarf 4/1/11 . chapter 1
Wow so far I love this !
I cant wait to see how she plays a later role in this!
Im actually thinking of making my own hunterxhunter fanfic, youve inspired me to start writing it