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Skylar of Gryffindor 10/9/11 . chapter 1there were 3girls They were looking through peoples MySpaces. The girl slowly came upon this one myspace. It had creatures in the background and the man looked like a psycho. She started laughing with her friend commenting on how ugly he was. Right then, an instant message came up. It said: SatanStalker: So how do u like my MySpace? XxLoVemExX: What? XxLoVemExX: Who is this anyway? SatanStalker: Well, you should know; youre looking at my MySpace right now. XxLoVemExX: How do you know that im looking at ur pro? SatanStalker:I know when people look at my MySpace. XxLoVemExX: What? That doesnt make any sense, how? SatanStalker: I just do. Satanstalker: Especially to pretty girls like you. Satanstalker: With very nice legs I might say. At the time the girl was wearing high shorts. She started to pull them down a little bit to cover what ever she could. Her and her friend started to get worried now. XxLoVemExX: Ok whatever man youre starting to scare the living sht out of me. SatanStalker: You should be afraid. SatanStalker: You wouldnt want an ugly guy like me touching your legs huh? I mean thats what you just said about me with your friend like a minute ago. They were in shock. Her friend: Holy crap man just block him hes a fcking psycho! The girl: Ok holy crap, you think hes watching us? SatanStalker: I am. SatanStalker: Well it wouldnt really matter if you blocked me anyway; it wouldnt stop me from coming to your house. XxLoVemExX: What? My house? SatanStalker: Yeah, youre alone so its not a problem. XxLoVemExX: Ok I think Im going to leave now because youre freaking me out. SatanStalker: Your screen name says love me, trust me that wont be a problem. SatanStalker has just signed off. The girl and her friend were really scared. Girls friend: Whatever lets just go upstairs trust me I doubt hes really coming. Its just a joke from someone. They went upstairs and were having a pillow fight. All of a sudden the girls friend said she had to go to the bathroom. The girl said ok. Ten minutes later the girl noticed that her friend was still in the bathroom and was wondering what was up. She goes and knocks but no one said anything she opens it and finds her friend there on the ground dead. She started to scream but when she turned around he was there. News the next morning said that there was one girl dead in the bathroom; her neck sliced with blood all over the ground. with her head nailed to the wall. Just her head. If you do not repost this in the next two minutes here will be three men, one in your bathroom, one in your room, and one killing your parents at that very moment. Tonight at 1:30am. Well what are you waiting for? Repost or you are going to die. |
B.A.Doyle 4/4/11 . chapter 1Ah gosh Mira, this is really good :) I'm so glad you wrote it about Viakel. |
J-F-Bibeau 4/4/11 . chapter 1So sweet! In just so few words, you have got your finger on the character's pulse (closer than you might realize!). I'd love to see what you might accomplish by tackling something a bit longer. Don't overshoot yourself: aim for something perhaps a page long, or two. Then gradually longer. I'd also love to see if you could write dialogue! I think you could pull it off. |
ChasedByTheShadows 4/3/11 . chapter 1Hey, I haven't actually read Felsic Current yet (though i plan to very soon), but I must say I love this! It got me very interested in the book. I know J-F (the author), I actually saw him today and he was telling me about the book. Job well done on the ficlet. It's very well written and I like it very much. |