|Reviews for Dain Sees the Light|
| RaineYlevol 4/7/13 . chapter 5
blackrose17-the misspellings were intentional :) jasmine isn't very literate yet, so her spelling sort of sucks. thanks for reading!
| blackrose17 4/3/13 . chapter 5
meet you cattle this is how you spell them
| evil-angel-sakura 1/15/13 . chapter 19
I love the story!It's amazing :) Forever Dain x Jasmine
| Echobaby123 1/7/13 . chapter 19
I love this story! Please write the next chapter!
| Darkness2468 1/5/13 . chapter 17
OMG WHERE IS CHAPTER 18!
| Lasmineluvr99 11/21/12 . chapter 16
That was a really... good(?) chapter. The writing was fantastic.
| D 11/21/12 . chapter 16
Erm... good writing... *_*
| Lasmineluvr99 10/19/12 . chapter 15
I love that the title of this chapter is Dun dun dunn... It's hilarious.
| Lasmineluvr99 10/19/12 . chapter 14
| Vandalia Sakura 10/9/12 . chapter 14
Yay! You updated! Was the person at the end Lief?Doom? I can't wait to find out!
| Blessed Yet Cursed 7/22/12 . chapter 13
Even thhough it's not Lasmine... It makes a really touching story;)
KeeP it up:)
| Vandalia Sakura 7/17/12 . chapter 13
Awwww. Teary eyed while reading this. Loved the chapter
| Lasmineluvr99 7/14/12 . chapter 13
Cool! Another chapter ALREADY! That was fast!
| Lasmineluvr99 7/13/12 . chapter 13
Nice chapter... CURSE YOU INVENTOR OF THE CLIFFHANGER, CURSE YOU!
| Guest 7/7/12 . chapter 12
This is a amazing story. You have a brilliant plot and great character interaction. Grammar is pretty good as have characterization and you put much more detail into how the main characters are feeling.
There are a few things you need to corect do.
First:Describe the backround and scenery(castle,garden,forest,tees) more,explain where the objects and other details are.
For example:you should have described the path Jasmine and Dain were on, or the castle's roof, or the hallway and rooms in the castle, the garden...
Second:Your whole story only describes your two main characters, you should have put more feelings and thoughts from the other characters(mainly Doom, Barda,Ghlaton and maybe some others(Nerida)).
I think its sweet how Dain and the Gnomes have become friends and you did a great job with fitting the characters psichs with the story.
It's really realistic! I just love it! :)
Third:The chapters feel (and are) quite short, even do in one chapter a lot happens. You'll fill that hole if you take my first and second advice.
Remember this is your story and I for one can't wait until the next chapter. Update soon!
Jasmine X Dain FOFEVER!