Hell Da!

That was sweet and not derpy at all. :)

The first thing I'm going to say, is: Way to be awesome! Seriously, you're doing so many things right that you ought to pat yourself on the back and reward yourself with a cookie before going on.

Now, for some things I'm really impressed with: Characterization. Your characterization is wonderful. You manage to keep everyone in character (a hard task, in and of itself); and, at the same time, you manage to give enough new insight into the characters to be, both interesting, and really fun to read. And-because this can't be stressed enough-you're doing both at the same time (which is one of the most difficult aspects of fanfiction-writing). Most fanfiction writers really veer off one way or the other.

I also gotta say, I love the family portrayal of the characters. I love touches like: Matt being the automatic choice for Arthur's confidant, or America's fake sleeping (random of me, I know; but those were some moments that just clicked!)

Your writing is very natural and flows very well (plus, I just plain like your writer's voice:). You definitely write drama well; and you manage to do so without writing a complete angst-fest (not that angst one-shots aren't good in their own right-they are! But I'm totally enjoying your plot-driven pathos). You also insert just enough humor to give the atmosphere its moments of lightness. And your humor and pathos actually *blend* (instead of coming off as bi-polar;).

And I love the subject. The North-American brothers and England are some of my favorite characters in the show (as well as countries, in real life;). And I'm always interested to see their relationships fleshed out.

Now for constructive criticism! If you don't like criticism, you can skip the next paragraph and call it good.;) To be quite honest, I don't even like writing criticism-I'm always afraid of deterring a good writer, instead of helping them. But I'm going to, this time, because I like this story. It's a good story! And, it could be even better. :)

I am a bit confused as to when the story takes place. At the beginning of the story, it says that Alfred has only recently left Arthur. But, Al also already owns a bomber jacket and a phone; and world meetings already happen. I wondered if the story might be a bit AU (and, if that is the case, I'd suggest saying so at the beginning, so as not to distract the readers from a good story). Of course, they often have technology before-it's-time in the comic (kind of as a joke); so you might have just been eluding to the comic (and I'm just being a bit dense;). The other thing I found mildly distracting was the names. Don't get me wrong! I love the human names; and I'm glad you're using them for your leads (besides, names are just fun). I was just a bit confused when the other countries were being known by their official-nation-names, instead of their human ones.

Don't worry about the mechanics errors you found though! They were pretty insignificant; and, you're right-that darn spell-check misses all kinds of things, doesn't it?

Anyway, I'm really interested to see where you're going with this: whether you'll write a hetalia version of the literal history between the NA bros and England for the next 150-odd yrs (1812, anglo-american rift, etc); or whether this will be a what-might-have-been kind of fic. Either way sounds like all kinds of fun to read. I'm definitely subscribing. :)

I can't stress how much I liked this story enough! Keep being awesome; and I hope you have as much fun writing the next chapter as I had in reading the first two!

Meg

I can't wait to read more from this fan fiction!

I'm sort of confused... Shouldn't Matthew be on Arthurs side? Because he's still Arthurs colony? Why is he helping Alfred? But other then that, I can't wait to see what's next! :D