Ah, don't we all, my friend? I believe we all have that desire in our heart; for The Great Lion to visit us so that we can truly feel Him, even if we don't know it. But I also believe that he abides here in our world, too. Not only in Narnia. Well, unliss you mean the Real Narnia. Where His country lies.

Lovely, lovely poem! Just wonderful! God bless you, and keep writing.

I loved this! I was recently cast as Aslan in a local theater company production of Narnia, and this poem helped me develop my character! I loved this so much... Brava!

Much love and God bless,

Rosey "Aslan" ;-)

that was a good poem, though if I may, I would like to make a suggestion...the last word 'abides' dosent really fit the context of the last stanza, I think the word would be 'resides' means to live in or to be in. But overall, a very descriptive and wonderful poem about Aslan.

Good! But, since Aslan is based on Jesus, He should love everyone ;)

Nicely done...I completely agree with Dearheart's review, though. I think you should redo the last line, because He DOES exist in our world-He's Jesus (although he has a different name, He's the same) It's nice to see that there are still some believer's out there-kudos to you by the Lion's mane! Keep it up...and may the Lion be with you... :)

I did like your poem, but I think the rythym in some parts didn't flow.

1st Stanza

You can always see love, in his golden eyes

2nd stanza:

But to creatures He likes, Only love pass those gates

3rd stanza:

When he wish (it sounds more old english) them to be, But engage Him in battle, And they're terrible to see

4th:

His mane shines like gold, in the bright morning sun

5th:

I wish with my heart, that he'd visit me

6th: Yes is not needed. It sounds cool just to repeat it the same way in the 1st stanza.

That's my opinion. I thought it described Aslan very well and I really enjoyed your poem. :)

Cheers in our Lord

Jaden G.

Beautiful poetry! I did notice that the last verse is wrong. Aslan is in our world. Remember...'I am known by another name[Jesus]'. The CrON also hints that Aslan made other worlds besides ours and Narnia.

Otherwise:

ABSOLUTLY FABULOUS POETRY!

Praise be to the Lion! Another believer! Yipe! (Okay, shutting up...)

Hmm... First of all, the words are beautiful, but the rhyme sceme is rather stretched out; and your choices in rhymes are rather, um, obvious (which isn't nessesarily BAD, just kinda...uncreative? Oh, never mind...) _ Secondly, "But to creatures He likes, only love passes those gates"...the word "likes" seems rather weak and shallow for describing how Aslan feels about us. I dunno...what do you think? Thirdly, "But only in Narnia, is where he abides"...that is incorrect. The Lion of Judah also abides in our world, but here He has another name, remember? I'm sure you know what it is. _ Other than those little nitpicky details, it was wonderful! I'm glad your using your gifts to glorify God! Keep it up, ignore the flames and pray for the flamers. With the Shield of Faith, you are able to "extinguish all the firey darts of the Evil One" (Ephesians 6:10-17). May "Aslan keep you in His mighty paws".

Happy Writing!

Dearheart

I absolutly love it. It captured everything perfectly.

(regarding the flamers) There was no reason to dislike it at all, it was perfectly written. It's to bad people hate god and good so much they'll actually flame this poem. I pray these flamers don't end up where they will end up if they continue down this road. Whether your christain or not depends on whether you agree with all of my post,but anyone can tell Aslan is all good and deserves to be loved. Anyone who hates him or this poem simply can't be good.

I loved that!

I have ventured back from current Narnia fics to find this WONDERFUL peice of poetry. "Aslan is strong,

As strong as can be,

I wish with all my heart,

He would come visit me!"

I think everyone that ever read any of the Narnia books feels the same here. Who wouldn't want to see Aslan. ((even though people (LIKE ME) might burst into tears upon seeing him))

Ignore the flamers, they're jealous of your obvious talent.

Mage

Loved it. I saved it and printed it and am putting it on the front of a binder for school so I'll see it every day. I try to write or make things that will help remind me that our Lion of Judah is by my side every day. This is another step.

Thank you.

This is uber corny. Go find a new calling, k?

Ah, but not JUST in Narnia!

“It isn’t Narnia, you know,” sobbed Lucy. “It’s you. We shan’t meet you there. And how can we live, never meeting you?”

“But you shall meet me, dear one,” said Aslan.

“Are-are you there too, Sir?” said Edmond.

“I am,” said Aslan. “But there I have another name. You must learn to know me by that name. This was the very reason why you were brought to Narnia, that by knowing me here for a little, you may know me better there.”

The Voyage of the Dawn Treader

(And that's the coolest part)

May you meet him soon.

Aslan is beautiful and his wisdom abounds.

But to those who know Him, He can always be found. Whether through stories of Narnia, as a lion we see. But in this world, our Savior and Lord He has been.

Just a little extra from me. I love the poem. Very beautiful!