Aww! Very sweet and cute! :) I 'ship them,too. :3

Missing a few commas, here and there, but otherwise - very nicely written! :D

Short but PERFECT :)

Please keep going, okay? A first kiss is so romantic! I've loved the idea of Mary and Dickon for a very long time, and I'm very eager to read more from you!

Very sweet and beautifully written!

Thanks for sharing!

AyameSakura61

p.s. I've got a fanart here, please check it out when you have time...;

art/Mary-and-Dickon-200541512