Brilliant work, m'dear! I look forward to anything else that you may present!

It's a little bitter, yeah. Not gonna lie. The effect is significant enough to throw the reader, I feel, but it's also understandable from Calliope's perspective, given her lack of information on the matter. Perhaps if she took the chance to talk to Harry about stuff...?

Oh it is a VERY good thing that Great Britain is allied with the United States. I imagine that the US equivalent of the DMLE or Hit Wizards is much more... vigorous in its execution of its orders than the British DMLE.

If you do that thing where everything seems fine, and then all the shit hits the fan, I will be very very VERY displeased.

Crap, Linus has Asclepius's wand, doesn't he? The just can't catch a break...

That. That was SO freaky at the end.

TLDR

a word of avidce. u shud mak u story more interesting by makin it more goffick and puttin more sex into it cuz itz rlly boring now. i cudnt get past the first chatpter.

AND SO IT BEGINS.

*dramatic orchestral number*

OH.

FUCK!

Daaaaaaaamn, you've got me blushing all over. I'm not sure which comment inspired the scene, but I'm flattered anyway!

Dude, you have no idea how flattered I am. Jeez, I inspired someone? Gives me warm fuzzies.

I guess I say "thank you"? I'm not sure how to handle this sort of situation. Thank you for taking my ideas and turning them into something I know will be great.

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In other news, the Centaurs really are spot-on with their characterization, and Benedicte is as creepily almost-psychotic as ever. Good job!

*faceplam*

Guadalupe, God damn it.

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In other news: MORE WEREWOLF CHILDREN WOO

Those are always my favorite bits. Also Benedicte/Calliope is unraveling beautifully. Incidentally, is it possible that the solution is to completely unravel the string, before re-weaving the fabric?

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Oh HOLY FUCK.

It's always the religious types...

FFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUU!

I was really hoping for my Werewolf Children though. Have I mentioned how adorable I found them? I'll probably be assaulted for that, actually, all things considered.

I'm sorry to get to the end of the posted text... which means, of course I have to wait and wait and wait... until the muse beats you up enough to post another chapter.

Its very good so far. Grammar and spelling fine. Characters well drawn. Plot seems OK, but there are a lot of issues that need to be dealt with to resolve them.

Its too bad that the good guys can never hex the bad guy, and take him out of action. The baddies always have all the advantages. LOL.

Thanks for all your hard work.

Best wishes,

Carl