Fantastic. I *love* your Hawke - she's so believable, and totally someone I would want to befriend and fight alongside. You've done a great job of capturing the voices of the rest of the characters, too.

Running off now to look up Falling, which I haven't read yet!

I love your writing, this is heart-breaking stuff. I'll be keeping a keen eye out for the continuation of this. Hmm, I can't help but wonder how you're going to handle the follow up conversation at the Hawke mansion...

Amazing first chapter. Your characters are believable, and the level of tension is great. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Wow! Talk about drama! I like how you do your Merril. Still the lovable ditz, but with a brain. I think that most people forget that as a Keeper's First, she would have been smart. I'm looking forward to more.

I like this... a lot. Please keep on writing interesting anything :)

Mmm... *Much* better than the game sequence. Thanks for sharing!

I love the personality of Hawke, I find it interesting to see how others write their Hawke's personalities

This is great. :) Looking forward to more.

Excellent story, it's incredibly intense. Have you though about putting Undone, Falling and No Place Free all in one story since they're all linked? I'm not saying you should, it's merely a suggestion.

Anyway, this was great. I look forward to more of your work.