So Percy has a kid? Plz wright more

I don't get all of this...But only some.

Damn

DO NOT SWEAR K ! THAT WAS NOT NICE HE IS YOUR DADDY

WHAT? PERCY HAS A DAUGHTER? i'm supposing it's annabeth's and his...

gontinue! update!

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WTH?

who told the gods?

you should so write more.

This has a lot of potential. I can't wait to read more - and take up the offer for a beta (no offense)

oo he's in trouble! Dun dun DUN! ha ha, hope it's a whole long story, cause i can't wait to see what happens! :)

So I really do like the story line, but the story needs help. CC time:

Since this is a prologue, I understand the leangth, but it could use way more details.

Your grammar could use some work, especially with capitolization and paragraphs.

Explain things more, so it gives the reader more information.

I hope this helps, and I would love to help you out, I truly think this story could be great! Feel free to PM me...

Okay, don't take this as a flame, but CC.

-I understand that this is a prologue so it may be short, but this needs way more description.

-A new paragraph should be started each time someone new speaks.

-You should always capatlize "I".

-Always check over your work for spelling and grammar before posting.

This story, however, does have potential to be good with how everyone would react and how Thalia and Nico would sneak around with one another. If you want help, I will be happy to be your beta. Just send me a message.

Best of luck! :)