I really like this - it's different, and I mean that in a good way. :)

You've really gotten into the characters' heads and it works. Great job!

Hmmm... don't know how I missed this one but glad to see it here. Love, love, love it!

:D I love it! Awesome job!

Lovely ... I found this very well done. Excellent descriptive tone, nice balance to it. I really enjoyed reading it.