Your grammar is weak, that is obvious. But it can be fixed. This site offers beta readers. You need one to help you because you have a major issue. You don't want "haters" then fix your problems.

I too am sick of Elizabeth's character, she has cheated on Lucky too many times, and is beyond redemption in my eyes.

How about Elizabeth kidnapped herself to try and endear Lucky to her, or ran away leaving Lucky with the kids.

If you know how to read, how is it you don't know how to write dialogue?