very nice! I love this oneshot... it has potentiel to be much more.

I really do like the idea of this. It actually makes me feel interested and invested in Ike, which is honestly a feat for me, so super-kudos there.

The contrasting of Mist and Ike was especially great, here, and showed the idea of him bottling up his emotions in an unhealthy way very well, without shoving the meta-ness of it down the reader's throat. I definitely appreciated that, as it brings an overarching depth to the story that really makes it work.

However, I kind of feel like the tone was a bit. . . not really flowery, but perhaps a bit verbose, given that it's tied to Ike's perspective? I'm not saying it should be especially simple, but there was something of a disconnect there for me, at least.

Especially considering the time crunch you were under with this idea, I think you did a superb job with this piece. From Ike's amnesia to Mist to Titania and Greil, everything was done very expertly. When you mentioned "Ike introspection" I had no idea how you were going to pull it off, but you framed it very well, and the ending scene seemed a fitting way to end a story like this.

My only qualm was that the theme of "vanity"/"in vain" seemed a bit tacked on, but that's understandable given the circumstances :P

I wish I had something more substantial to say, but I liked this.

omg this is so sad... i felt like i was going to cry, i guess this takes place after the death of Elena... wow this is just amazing! great story can't wait for the next one u do! X')