I'm so glad you took my advice! It looks so much neater now, and it's so much easier to read. Good job, you're doing well.

W-wha? Bunny suit on...Kinoshita? I can't imagine it...

This is pretty good so far! I wonder...are Tskuino and Meister going to make an appearance in this fic? Hmm...

How cute! There aren't any stories with Kageto in them, I saw this and got so excited! The concept is great, and I think you're doing a good job so far, but it's a bit hard to read... There should be a new paragraph when somebody starts talking, that makes everything so much easier.

I sure hope you're going to put Suwabara or Monica in here, though. They're my favorites 3