Great story. All your stories seem to be based in reality if you know what i mean. I really like the way u create the action scenes. Extremely vivid. Great ending too!

Now time to add the dark lightning fp weps (Darkness tb, Bloddy SD, Crystal Homo, and ShootingStar SR)

:P FP OP

Not bad at all my friend.

Your story flows very well and your writing and grammar are pretty good. A few errors, but nothing that couldn't be expected or understood. An interesting story involving a return to the S4 League after the start of the Dark Lightning. My new chapter will include the upgrades regarding the Dark Lightning too.

Anyway, as I said. Pretty good for a one-time shot. Might be fun to see if you take it anywhere else.

Gamoden